Wednesday, July 9, 2014

Man of the house

He was a desperate man,
a child really,
broken and sad, left to

raise three children when he
could barely take
care of himself 

She was a broken child
desperate for a 
man to care for her

but always left carrying
the burden of
caring for herself 

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30 comments:

  1. interesting interpretation...sounds like it could be the start of an interesting story together...or at least a parallel...oft those bent on caring for others fail to care for themselves....

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    1. I've seen way too many people in this situation.

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  2. Did these two broken people get together? It sounds that way. My thought: two broken people together do not make a workable whole.

    Welcome to Poetry Jam. Nice to meet you.

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    1. Thanks for the welcome, Mary!

      And I agree... putting two broken people together doesn't make a whole!

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  3. This is an interesting concept.Do two broken people work out together?Do two well adjusted people work out together?Does one broken person need to be with a well adjusted person. I am sure there are a lot of psychological theories but I don't think anyone really knows the truth of the matter. People have a habit of being unpredictable and individual in spite of governments desperate to make one size fit all.

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    1. People are definitely unpredictable. And relationships -- between broken people and those who are less so -- are never guaranteed. Great point.

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  4. Or did they just separate finding togetherness impossible?...i wonder...nice one..

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  5. An impossible situation indeed. What a sad scene. Thanks for posting this.

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  6. I wonder whether she left him since he could not take care of her and this was what she craved for. It seems they could not build something together.

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    1. I originally thought it was a father/daughter. Perpetuating the cycle and all that. But could definitely be a couple too. So many ways this situation plays out.

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  7. A loving home and a "normal" family situation is such an impossible place for so many children worldwide. A child who lacks these truly sees a "normal" home as an impossible place... Lovely poem.

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    1. Oooh. I like that turn. "A child who lacks these sees a normal home as an impossible place." So so true.

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  8. Two broken people attempting to make a go of it - from what I've seen of these situations, there tends to be a lot of collateral damage. Brilliant writing!

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  9. Thats almost a true story known to me....

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    1. Me too ... and so many people I know. :-/

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  10. Broken children raising children they are breaking. A cycle that is not easily broken. But sometimes it is, and someone grows up. I've seen it happen. Thoughtfully written.

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    1. It takes a lot of thought and hard work to break the cycle. Definitely true that it can be done though!

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  11. Your poem took me strait away to a song from a movie, the Sound of Music - the line from the song is "...impossible things are happening everyday"

    Much love...

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    1. How do I not remember that line? I've seen that movie so many times!

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  12. i can feel the desire in this and the impact of longing. I love the way it flows.

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  13. Loved how you played with the words, the situation. Very clever and beautifully penned.:-)

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  14. Always interesting to see how other people read things. For me, this was a father/daughter scenario. But obviously could be any two people who's pasts and pains make for an impossible situation.

    Thanks for the thoughts and comments!

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  15. So sad and melancholic, I hope they can fill each other's empty and broken places eventually. I know families and couples like these.

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  16. I first thought it would be about two people who separated. Realized it was father-daughter scenario after reading your comment! Beautiful :)

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  17. This is sad because there are families who actually live and feel this way... But in many cases they just do their best, they are unable to find a better way to do it. It's a shame. Delightful write, Kimiko! Thanks for posting this.

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